I like how you kept the 20 seconds of courage going through the whole thing. I also liked how you put dialogue into it and the story was like a movie going through my mind.
When you are young, one of everybody's struggles, is to be like the older kids. But at seven it seems that you were sort of better than those older kids, and that's unique.
Hello there. This is a great essay. You had Great detail and a lot of good examples. Good Job.
I like that you wrote the way a little kid thinks like with the "big kids" and how you said that you went to sit on your daddy's lap
Your "This I Believe" essay was really good, and I liked how descriptive and detailed it was!
This essay was so cute! I absolutely loved how you wrote in the mindset of a seven year old! I've had so many moments like this, where I'm so terrified and then I just do it. And after that I usually liked it, and did again! Loved your piece, great job :)
I really like the way you described how the older kids where to scared to jump off the rock but you faced the scary thought and just jumped.
I LOVED you essay and all of the figurative language in it! You had great detail and made a powerful statement with your writing. Great job!
I loved your essay it shows that everyone has 20 seconds of courage no matter who you are. It really opened my eyes. I thought that only a select number of people had courage.
I liked how you added a good story, and how much figurative language you used. Also I can relate because I have moments when I don't want to do something, but then I do it, and want to do it again. Great job!(:
I really enjoyed your This I believe essay! My favorite part of it was that you kept the 20 seconds of courage throughout the whole thing
I loved how you put it in your perspective, telling us what you were thinking and how you felt. :)
Your essay was wonderfully wrote. You had great detail and a nice statement that almost everyone had to deal with at one point. Great job!
I can really relate to this. When we went to Florida, we went to a cliff and everyone jumped off but me. I had finally gained some courage and flew. It felt like I was in the air for 100 years. It took lots of courage like you needed.
I really liked this essay. I loved the detailed description of how you jumped off the cliff and the dialogue you added in the story was a nice touch.
I thought your essay was really good! I liked how you put so much detail and description into it.
I absolutely love this paper! I love the detail.
I really liked the last sentence of your paper!
I wouldn't ever be able to do something like that. I applaud you with that 20 seconds of courage.
I liked how you added dialogue into your paper!
I liked the beginning when it had a lot of description. It was really good!
I loved how you described the part when the big kids dint jump but you had the courage and did. Good Job!!