I liked how in the beginning you put in the quote "all who wander are not lost." Because I just finished reading the Lord Of The Rings and it made me think of that part of the book, which was really good by the way
I loved your thesis and how you used a quote from a book that makes the thesis more detailed.
I liked how you explained how it affected you and how everything happened
Your story gets to me because I alway have arguments and I think that he's wrong and he thinks that i'm wrong, mostly there isn't a wrong answer but we always forgive at the end and your story just makes me remember all of those dumb arguments we have
I like how you added the quote, and the experience you had, and how you added where you've been.