I like your essay because I can refer to it because I had the same experience with travel baseball
I like how you used the experience from Baseball to start out your story. It was a great attention getter. Especially to me. I have a brother who plays Baseball and he had a similar experience.
Not only did you use a lot of descriptive words to show what it was you felt at the time of your trying out for the baseball team but you also made a very valid point about the way people innovate