I like all the details that you put in and told us how long you have been playing softball. I like how you were talking about teamwork kind of and confidence.
i really liked how you used softball to show how you believe in being a team player. I feel the same way about my sport.
"I believe in being confident, staying true to who you are, and being a team player. You need to be strong in what you wanna do! Stand up and never forget what you believe in!"
That was just so powerful. Its true and it was a great way to start the essay. Your essay was just so inspiring, I was touched. You wrote it so well.
I really liked how you used softball to explain that you need confidence in yourself, I also liked how you said you were as equally good as anyone else who stepped on that field.
Your essay was great! I really loved the way like Alexis said, that you you used softball to show how important confidence is. I also liked how you gave vivid examples that led you to believe this.
I liked how you said you need confidence in softball.I really like how you were confident in your paper! Keep up the good work!